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How do you Haiku? (beehaw.org)
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Share a haiku about your day!

A moment of peace,

That's all that I'm asking for,

Please go to bed now.

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[–] [email protected] 1 points 2 years ago

Stressed out about work, but at least today I had breakfast for dinner

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I know I already commented on this, but this really stuck in my head since I read it. I feel like I could write an essay about it! About accepting pain and stress for what they are and finding joys in small things. Also how absurdity and playfulness can cheer us up by putting something where it shouldn't normally be (breakfast for dinner). It reminded me of a Joyce short story in Dubliners where a character had "the newspaper for dessert". In this case the character was being shown as devoid of all the little joys in life. You've done the opposite in your haiku by putting something decadent and sweet in the place of the sensible and savoury. There's something cheeky and bold about it, like you're a young adult who's just moved out of their parents' house finally trying out ice cream for breakfast.

I love how you turned a difficult situation into a humorous one with the simple line "but at least today...". It makes me want to look for more "at least todays" in my own life.

I like how in the end, the problem isn't resolved, but the last two lines provide respite. It's an invitation to take a break from whatever is stressing us out, even for a moment. That can be an extremely hard thing to do, but you've made it so simple just by saying "at least today..."

What a gorgeous part of your day to share. Thank you!